Write a blog post in 300 words or less, excluding the title. The post can be in any format, whether flash fiction, non-fiction, humorous blog musings, poem, etc. The blog post should show:It is SOOO hot out here. Seriously, hello global warming. I fan myself and eat a Tacise, which is so cool and pepperminty I want to rub it all over my body.
- that it’s morning,
- that a man or a woman (or both) is at the beach
- that the MC (main character) is bored
- that something stinks behind where he/she is sitting
Just for fun, see if you can involve all five senses AND include these random words: "synbatec," "wastopaneer," and "tacise." (NB. these words are completely made up and are not intended to have any meaning other than the one you give them).
- that something surprising happens.
Especially the peppermint because something kinda smells.
I peer at the woman sprawled out on the beach towel beside me. She's spilling out of her red Synbatec bikini like an overstuffed bratwurst. An open tube of coconut-scented sunscreen lies next to her.
On the other side of me, a bunch of kids are making a sand castle. One little boy is crying, yelling something that sounds like 'wastopaneer.' I listen carefully to realize he's saying he 'wants to play here.'
The smell isn’t from the fat woman or the kids.
I put my hand up to stare at the horizon, where Gull Island is just visible. When I was a kid, horrible smells used to drift inland from that place. Rumors said the government was experimenting on animals out there, turning them into freaks. But that was years ago.
That smell is horribly familiar, though – rancid and greasy, as if someone mixed rotting fat with manure.
Sand grits between my teeth. I should move downwind.
I rise to pick up my towel, snapping it to dust off the sand. And then I scream.
There’s a claw attached to a skeletal hand poking up right where I sat. It’s a human hand…but the claw could belong to a dinosaur. It twitches.
I scream again and the kids come running over.
“Cool!” one of them yells and then the sand erupts. There’s a blur of huge, skinless body, of a snapping, beak-like mouth and blazing red eyes. Everyone scatters…except the crying boy.
He wasn’t fast enough.
He’s gone.
And I don’t think anyone will want to play here ever again.
30 comments:
Whoa! That was creepy! Love it!! Very surprising and wonderful imagery! You have my vote and follow :)
(I'm entry #5)
hah, love the use of 'wastopaneer!'
wow, the end is super creepy and unexpected.
Wow, I know you hinted at the dark mentioning the animal testing on the island but wow. The ending had me wanting to crawl under the covers.
Oh man and she was sitting on it! That poor poor boy:( Great job Melodie!
Oh my heck, your story is awesome! I loved it. Great job.
Very creative having it beneath you! Love *Gull Island*, great use of the words! ; )
Oohh, creepy! Great story. :)
Creepy and exciting. I love horror. Good job with the challenge.
I've been selected as a judge for the final challenge in the Third Platform Building Campaign - and I'm happy to announce that your entry has been chosen to advance to the next phase of judging as a quarter-finalist.
Well done and congratulations!
Ohh, well done! You sucked me right into the story. Great use of the challenge words. Nice background about Gull Island. And good, descriptive writing. Tight ending. You have my vote. I'm following you, too.
I'm number 35.
You lulled us into a false sense of security at the beginning there! Great job, and fantastic ending!
Mine is #25.
Gah! Don't scare me on the day there are dangerous animals running loose all over my area! ;) (Did you hear about that? It's all over the news now.)
Great job on the entry! The end was such a creepy twist. I loved it! :)
Yikes that was a creepy ending!
Love this one, especially the surprise at the end. Although my favourite line was: She's spilling out of her red Synbatec bikini like an overstuffed bratwurst.
I laughed out loud at that.
Great work!
Oooo scary!!!
LOVE THE CREEP FACTOR HERE :D
Congratulations on moving on in the competition :-)
That is one freaky ending! Nice one! :)
Hello fellow Campaigner! *waves hello* Your newest follower here. Nice to meet you. :)
Whoa. LOVED the ending, skinless bodies and all.
"He's gone." was perfect and chilling.
I also enjoyed the voice of this piece. Well done.
Hugs,
Lola
*Shrieks!* This is awesome! Totally unexpected and perfect for halloween. You totally freaked me out, which means... you're getting my vote!
I'm #58. Come check it out if you want. :)
AAAAH! That was awesome! I loved the end so much. I honestly didn't see it coming AT ALL. You got me good. I'm #70 :)
Vivid descriptions :) I especially like the "bratwurst" one. Nice job!
Oh dear, didn't see that coming! Mine is #56
Woah! Creepy! Great job :D
I'm entry #69
I could sure visualize that! If it were a movie, that thing jumping out of the sand would make the entire theater jump!
Fantastic! Great use of the challenge words and description! I am #83
Awesome, spooky and visually very vivid. Well done!
I loved how you used the words and that was quite a twist at the end. :)
Freaky, creepy and fantastic! Great job!
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