Jul 13, 2011

Blogfest story chain

We're almost to the end of Dio's tale and it's been a wild ride. Check out the post before me at awesome Angie's blog

OR read the whole thing at once on Deana's blog tomorrow morning!

My assignment was to begin wrapping up from the climax and use the words: blue, carriage and seldom.

But when Dio looked out the window, she nearly sighed with relief. It was just Tony.
But as he neared, Dio’s relief was short-lived. Because the Tony she knew had a solid face, not one that shifted and moved like pixels on a computer screen. Tony’s entire body was made of Grandoolex. They were tiny, buzzing swarms of blue insect-like creatures. Besides their wings, the biggest things on them were their giant pincers.
“It’s not the pincers you need to worry about,’ Roddern told her quietly. “They seldom use those.”
Dio stared at him. “Well, what should we worry about then?”
Roddern pointed. “That.”
Her eyes followed his finger to Tony’s body, which wavered and then split to make way for a golden carriage pulled by mosquitoes. The Grandoolex bowed as it passed. Dio squinted. Was one of them holding a trumpet?
It was. As the carriage door opened, the blue creature piped a tiny tune. Out of the carriage came Tinkerbell.
Well, Dio thought as she observed more closely, more like a cross between Tinkerbell and Glinda the good fairy. She had a crown and a sky-blue dress and a smile almost wider than her tiny face.
Dio wondered if fangs would pop out of the Grandoolex queen’s mouth. She moved closer to her Dad, who still seemed dazed, and took his hand for courage.
But no. The queen bowed deeply to Dio and then Roddern, who started with surprise.
“Greetings, fair one. We have waited for years to see the All-Seeing Stone to be returned to our land. And now, it’s here.”
Dio blinked. “What is?”
The queen pointed at her father. “The All-Seeing Stone, of course. It has chosen for us a new leader! Thanks to you, my people will live in peace.”
Dio’s Dad cleared his throat. “What are you saying? I’m not royalty.”
The Grandoolex queen nodded. “Now you are. Any human purified by the All-Seeing Stone is worthy. Hail, mighty king!”
“Hail King!” piped the Grandoolex.

Check out the fabulous ending at Kristin's blog, the Neophyte Writer.


Angie Cothran said...

Nice! I was hoping Dio's dad would save the day! And great use of the word carriage--that's a hard one.

Alleged Author said...

I love the idea of them hoping for a stone to bring them peace (even if they do start some crap). Cool!

Lora R. Rivera said...

Crazy! "Any human purified by the All-Seeing Stone is worthy." Must find keep reading to find out what happens next. Thank you thank you!

Andrea Mack said...

Oh wow, what creativity! This story has really taken some interesting turns and twists.

JRo - Jaye Robin Brown said...

Wow - who would have predicted where our end has taken us? One more to read.

Angelina C. Hansen said...

Nice surprise. The angsty girl we met ages ago becomes King.

Deana said...

So she saved the day by bringing her dad back and purifiing him with the stone. Who would have thought it? Do we have some creative masterminds or what?!

lindy said...

Very creative!!! I like how you made Dio's dad the key to all this! Who would have thought he would be chosen as King to the Grandoolex, bringing with him peace?

Donna K. Weaver said...

Love it!

Stephanie said...

Wow, did not see that coming. Loving it :-)

Christina Mercer said...

Awesome way to start wrapping up story. Love the All Seeing Stone!

Anonymous said...

Great twist, love how much fantasy is in it now. Carriage was a tough one and you nailed it!

Anonymous said...

This was excellent!